I have analysed London to Brighton and I had tried to base my opening sequence slightly on the opening of that, because in that opening the audience is put straight into the action and dialogue. So thats why I wanted to include the dialogue between my Nan & Siri.
Miss thought I had included too much walking, but I should like to stick with my Saturday Night Fever follow-on theme.
Miss wants me to include more dialogue between Siri and my Nan. She wants maybe Siri and my nan arguing and Siri trying to push past to run out of the door. I feel that the meeting of Lex and Siri will the more important dialogue, because these are to be the main characters, so I would prefer to focus more on that.
Also, I wanted to show the audience that Siri was sneaking out of the house and her mother didn't even notice because she was too busy worrying about where her dinner was. She could get away without her mother knowing and no-one would come after her straight away.
I believe a synopsis should not tell the whole story, and because I had written "abusive mother" my teacher believes that I should show this in some way, but I think that could be something that has happened earlier and now this is the point where she decides to leave. The film could have flashbacks to previous incidents and arguments at a later stage.
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